the yamster
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Ok, so I am writing a story and my main character is about to explain the reason she is being sent to a boarding school in the middle of nowhere. You see, she can see and talk to spirits but her parents don't believe her and actually think she is going a bit mad. So they are sending her to this school.
This is what I have put for before she explains.
I was almost glad to be getting rid of them, because whatรขโฌโขs worse that parents who donรขโฌโขt even believe in their own daughter? But Iรขโฌโขm not surprised. No one understands me, and to be honest, I donรขโฌโขt really understand other people. But thatรขโฌโขs not the reason theyรขโฌโขre just ditching me at some posh, crumbling old castle in Fogland. Oh no. Itรขโฌโขs much more than that.
But I don't want to put "You see, I can talk to ghosts" etc because it sounds childish, cliche and boring. How can I explain it without it sounding dumb? If I have to change anything, I am willing to, so any suggestions for improvement are very welcome.
10 points best answer!
SHUT UP YOU DON'T NEED TO SHOUT BY THE WAY THIS WAS MEANT FOR ACTUAL WRITERS.
This is what I have put for before she explains.
I was almost glad to be getting rid of them, because whatรขโฌโขs worse that parents who donรขโฌโขt even believe in their own daughter? But Iรขโฌโขm not surprised. No one understands me, and to be honest, I donรขโฌโขt really understand other people. But thatรขโฌโขs not the reason theyรขโฌโขre just ditching me at some posh, crumbling old castle in Fogland. Oh no. Itรขโฌโขs much more than that.
But I don't want to put "You see, I can talk to ghosts" etc because it sounds childish, cliche and boring. How can I explain it without it sounding dumb? If I have to change anything, I am willing to, so any suggestions for improvement are very welcome.
10 points best answer!
SHUT UP YOU DON'T NEED TO SHOUT BY THE WAY THIS WAS MEANT FOR ACTUAL WRITERS.